I have accepted this as the love in my life,
waking up with the sun and scent of flowers,
the dew glistening in the morning sun showers,
sitting on this bench as I feel what to write.
Waking up with the sun and scent of flowers,
after a peaceful and restful sleep last night,
sitting on this bench as I feel what to write,
losing myself to the pen ink for multiple hours.
After a peaceful and restful sleep last night,
my love of writing has my time completely devoured,
losing myself to the pen ink for multiple hours,
the sun has retired rendering me in moonlight.
My love of writing has my time completely devoured,
being blessed with this talent is divine delight,
the sun has retired rendering me in moonlight.
although it's dark the stars leave me feeling empowered.
Being blessed with this talent is divine delight,
the dew glistening in the morning sun showers,
although it's dark the stars leave me feeling empowered,
I have accepted this as the love in my life.
© Steve Bertrand aka. stevieb 20110908
This was a really nice challenge :) Usually I can see ahead multiple stanzas, but I've never tried to do it knowing I'd be reusing lines again!
ReplyDeleteGlad to see an example of a-b-b-a rhyme with the Pantoum as this is all new to me. I quite like it. And, I certainly know that feeling of hours passing in what seems a moment as writing takes over. It's both intoxicating and a bit scary at the same time :)
ReplyDeleteI never knew what a pantoum was before, nor have I ever used abba either. I really like how the poem came full circle and actually worked in the last stanza. I'm glad I took this challenge.
ReplyDeletesouns like you have a rather lovely life...to write all the time is def a dream of mine...and you play so well within the form..a first for me and def a challenge reusing those lines...
ReplyDeleteI like this poem a lot. Writing about the theme of writing is wonderful! I could picture you in the sunlight writing this very poem, and just finishing it up as the sun set and the stars came out - smiling all the while. Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteA great use of this form to describe the way writing is part of your life. :)
ReplyDeleteLove your form (well done Poet!) and love the inspiration! Occasionally I get the time where I can let my pen run...and the hours fly away! Great way to take the passion for the pen as muse, and fit it into form, no less! Poetic Awesomeness!
ReplyDeleteThank you Natasha! That means a lot coming from you! I really enjoyed the challenge and the education :)
ReplyDeleteA very natural flow, and a feeling of serenity and peace pervading it all takes the repetition of the cascade form from a hammer to a stream always rippling over the same rocks reflectively. Enjoyed it much.
ReplyDeleteThe metaphor of writing into the fullness of a day serves you well and the form amplifies this by the repetitions. You managed it perfectly and there is great fulfillment in it. This form is rather magical as it seems to be giving every poem I've read a frame work to stay steady or to deviate from slightly. Very well done!
ReplyDelete..losing myself to the pen ink for multiple hours...sound familiar somehow...nice use of the form steve
ReplyDeletea well crafted piece - i liked the theme and its development is great - i think we could all relate a little - so you have your audiences empathy and relation straight away. smooth flow
ReplyDeletecool poem
arron shilling
And what a great love! Good abba form rhyme too. I must try to go back to pen and paper, but life forces more blackberry finger tapping on public transport! Excellent write!
ReplyDeleteVery clever to choose that unusual rhyme scheme and stillmake it work as a pantoum.
ReplyDeleteThank you Rosemary, however, I was taught that this was a legitimate scheme of the form (abba) over at dVersePoets where I originally found the wonderful writeup by Hollyheir: http://dversepoets.com/2011/09/08/formforall-pantoum/
ReplyDeleteI have never attempted (or even knew about) form poetry before I saw that post, so I thought to do something wildly different, I'd attempt it in the way that was most remote to my normal style :)